’cause it’s the slyness thine..

I’mma part of your existence,
But you are oblivious.
I’mma your darkest secrets of each rule,
But you are delirious.

You insulted me,
Yet thou observant.
You treads me e’eryday,
Yet thou improvident.

You will forget me,
I believe it.
Leave me forlorn,
I confide it.

Will bring me no later,
Rather then there would be no story,
This is ’cause only your slyness;
Not mine, not hers, nor anyone else’s.

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38 thoughts on “’cause it’s the slyness thine..

  1. This is well stated, fully understandable. It emotes well, and I like the flow when I read it. Got a couple things: ***In “Yet thou observant.” and “Yet thou improvident.” – don’t they need a “being verb” i.e., Yet thou art observant” ?? I used “art” because you have “Thou” – which makes me curious – why is it sometimes “You” and sometimes “Thou”? I enjoy the switch, was just curious about why it was done πŸ™‚ ***In your last line – “Not mine, not her, nor anyone else.” — I would recommend adding the possessive (‘s’) to “her” and else” so you get ‘Not mine, not hers, nor anyone else’s.’ Just those minor things – again I really enjoyed this read. Good work!

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    1. First of all I want to say thanks for those appreciation that you enjoyed my writing. And your curiosity to learn those things is permissible. First, I can’t use there art in – “Yet thou observant”- and if I use this so meaning of this poetry overall will be changed. And you recommended me for last line – “Not mine, not her, nor anyone else”- Instead I was going to use first – ” Not me, not her, nor anyone else ” – but that’s not fitted anyway there. so I used this. and once again I did grammatical errors. 😝

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  2. Hi! I enjoyed your poem as it has a style I haven’t seen before, and the subject intrigued me – for personal experience and just because it’s a fascinating subject of human behaviour. πŸ™‚ Thanks for visiting my blog.

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  3. I loved the below lines of yours : You insulted me,
    Yet thou observant.
    Will bring me no later,
    Rather then there would be no story,!!!!! Great thoughts.. I would feel great if you comment on my blogs too.. that would encourage me to write more.

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